Walt : truly captivating recount
So this week I blogged a recount about my holidays and yeah it a blast doing my holiday so I hope you get ready for my interesting blog enjoy.
what I have to reflect on is do a better background and my good saying to myself is I am impress.
Kia ora Hemi,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your recount about your holiday you had in Rotorua and the way you used the five senses to describe what you did. Maybe next time you could work on proofreading, using paragraphs and making sure your writing can be read clearly. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
Tēnā koe Hemi, it's Michael from Room 5. I really like hearing about your holiday. What's the best thing that you went on? Maybe next time you could explain how you felt on the sky swing. Blog ya later!
ReplyDeleteHi Hemi,Tyrell here. I really like your holiday recount. It was interesting and detailed. I like how you told most of what you did during your holiday. Maybe next time you could reread and correct your spelling. Blog ya later.
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ReplyDeleteHey Hemi,I love your recount about your holiday it was very interesting.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Hemi its Nikau here from your class. I really like your captivating Recount about Rotorua I remember seeing you there at the mall. Maybe next time you could change the colour of the font. Keep up the good work and blog ya later.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Hemi, my name is Amber I am a year 6 student at Paihia School in Te Ngahere. I really enjoyed reading your recount that you posted on your blog. It sounds like you have had a very exciting school holiday. On the school holidays I had a really fun school holiday as well. I really enjoyed reading this because you have added a DLO on it to make it more interesting for people to read. Maybe next time you could change the color on your slide so we could read more clearly.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work!
Did you have a exciting holiday?
Kia Ora Hemi my name is Angus from Paihia school I am a year 8 student. I really enjoyed reading your post about your holiday recount and i found it really interesting. I also like when you said “The heartwarming trail” that explained how the trail was in a creative way. I've also been to the luge at Rotorua and it's really fun.
ReplyDeleteWill you ever go to Rotorua again?